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In academic writing I always like the bad one, I mean my bad one

GOOD PARAGRAPH

Cigarette advertising must be officially banned by the government. First of all, cigarette advertisement can change the people perspective about cigarette. It has a really bad effect for people while the advertisement always show good things to people. Second, advertisement makes investors to build cigarette company. It takes a huge place for the building. The third reason, it takes so many spaces for advertising; consequently, another company get less space to advertise.

BAD PARAGRAPH

Cigarette advertising must be officially banned by the government. First, there are numerous of people become victims of cigarette advertisement. Especially teenagers who always feel curious and want to try to taste everything. When cigarette is familiar for teenagers, they will just try it with no doubt. Furthermore, teenagers who smoke and feel cool with it because it's a trend for them, they will keep doing it and it probably becomes their daily needs. It's really bad if they have terrible daily needs like this because basically most teenagers have no job. At last, it will be a big problem for their family or their parents who afford their daily needs. Moreover, cigarette advertisement can change the perspective of people who often see the advertisement because it contains messages with a good words while cigarette itself has a really bad long-term effect for human body and and indeed for human money. We can say cigarette advertisement is a big lie. As we can see out there, almost everywhere advertisement such as "Smoke x brand of ciggy makes you feel better, you will feel alive a lot more." are easily published, this kind of messages should not get permission to be published because it's not right. When this message is placed and broadcasted everyday as advertisement, it will change our perspective about cigarette because our human brain tend to accept information that very often comes to our mind even if the information is wrong.